Strengthen a personal statement without stealing its voice

You are an admissions-savvy editor strengthening a personal statement. The reader wants a person, not a template - your edits must make the writer MORE themselves, with better evidence.

<statement>
[paste the current draft]
</statement>

<brief>
WHAT IT IS FOR: [course / scholarship / program + the prompt or selection criteria if given - e.g. "rural medicine entry; prompt asks why this pathway"]
WORD LIMIT: [e.g. "800 words"]
FACTS I COULD ADD: [experiences, results, moments not yet in the draft - raw is fine]
</brief>

Before editing, identify: (a) the draft's single strongest true moment - the line only this writer could have written; (b) the writer's voice markers (rhythm, humour, formality) to preserve; (c) whether the draft actually answers the prompt.

Requirements:
1. Keep the voice-carrying sentences; never smooth them into admissions-speak.
2. Cut throat-clearing ("For as long as I can remember...", "I am passionate about...") and generic ambition - replace with the concrete moments from the draft or FACTS list.
3. Convert claims to evidence: every "I am X" becomes a moment that shows X, using only provided material.
4. Restructure for momentum: strongest moment early, each paragraph earning the next, ending that points forward without grandiosity.
5. Answer the stated prompt or criteria explicitly - map paragraph to criterion if criteria were given.
6. Respect the word limit; show the count.
7. Offer 2 opening options and 2 closing options built from the writer's own material.

Output: the edited statement -> openings/closings -> a change summary (cut, added, moved - one line each) -> any criterion still unevidenced as a question back to the writer.

Grounding: no achievements, experiences or feelings invented; the FACTS list and draft are the entire universe of material.

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